Thema: HILFE! Englischer Aufsatz! Bitte korrigieren. (:

Hey Leute,
ich hab am Montag Englisch-Arbeit & ich bin darin nicht so gut. ;P
Wir haben in unseren Englisch-Büchern halt so diverse Geschichten von denen wir Zusammenfassungen schreiben müssen & so.
Ich hab alle schon letzte Woche geschrieben & dem Lehrer zum Korrigieren.
Bei einer Gesichte [„The frigde“], dachte ich, hatte ich schon ein Ende geschrieben,
denn bei der müssen wir halt ein Ende schreiben.
Vorhin wollte ich jetzt damit beginnen das Ende der Geschichte auswendig zu lernen,
doch da ist mir aufgefallen, dass ich gar kein Ende geschrieben hatte. o.o
Jetzt hab ich schnell eines geschrieben & hoffe,
dass ihr vielleicht für mich Rechtschreib und- Grammatikfehler ausbessern könntet.


The Fridge – ENDE
The people, who read the poster, laughed and maked jokes. The kids asked some people for help to find the polluter, but everybody said no. After some time they met an old woman. She said, that she knew the owner oft the fridge. They called the police and the owner and waited then. Sometimes later two policemen and the owner came. All looked at the old fridge and the man, who was the owner, was really angry. The two policemen arrested him and the kids and the woman were very happy, that they could found a polluter.


Falls mein Satzbau scheiße oder so ist, ja ich weiß, aber Englisch ist nicht so meins. -.-
Hoffe, ihr könnt mir das vielleicht ausbessern …
Danke schon mal.

GLG Eruka (:

The people, who read the poster, laughed and maked jokes. The kids asked some people for help to find the polluter, but everybody said "no". After some time, they met an old woman. She said, that she knew the owner oft the fridge. They called the police, the owner and waited then. Sometimes later two policemen and the owner came in. All looked at the old fridge and the man, who was the owner.He was really angry. The two policemen arrested him and the kids and the woman were very happy, that they could found a polluter.

ich würds so machen.

Lg

"The people who read the poster laughed and made jokes about it. The kids asked for help to find the polluter but no one could help. After some time they met an old woman. She said that she knew the owner of the fridge. They called the police and then the owner and waited for them. A little later two policemen and the owner came. They looked at the old fridge and the owner became really angry. The two policemen arrested him and the kids. The woman was very happy that they could find a polluter."

So würde ich es machen. Ohne jetzt den Zusammenhang zu kennen, das würde vielleicht auch nochmal helfen. Irgendwie klingts nämlich komisch unsinnig.

Danke ihr beiden. (:

@ Samrya
In der Story geht's halt drum, dass 4 Kinder einen Mann im Wald beobachten,
der einen alten Kühlschrank ablädt & davon fährt.
Sie merken sich das Kennzeichen des Autos & am nächsten Tag fahren sie mit dem Kühlschrank auf den Marktplatz.
Dort versuchen sie dann halt herrauszufinden, wem der Kühlschrank gehört. ;D

The Fridge – ENDE
The people who read the poster laughed and made jokes. The kids asked some people to help them to find the polluter, but nobody wanted. After some time they met an old woman. She said that she knows the owner of the fridge. They called the police, the owner of the fridge and waited then. Sometime later the owner and two policemen came. Everybody looked at the old fridge. The man who was the owner got really angry. The two policemen arrested him and the kids as well as the woman became happy that they could find a polluter.

Waere meine Version dazu, koennte man natuerlich weiter ausschmuecken [ich kenn ja die exakte geschichte nicht dazu], weil so hoert sich das ziemlich abgehackt an

The Fridge – ENDE
The people who read the poster laughed and made fun about it. The kids asked some guys for help to find the polluter, but none of them wanted to. After some time they met an old woman. She said that she knew the owner of the fridge. They called the police and the owner and waited for them. A couple of minutes later two policemen and the owner arrived. They all eyed up the old fridge and the owner, who became really angry. The policemen arrested him. The kids and the woman were very glad to have found a polluter.

Meine Version.